The background is too busy; I think that is the only real problem. Try a simple gradient or a subdued pattern, and see how that looks. As for if this should be posted in this forum, I think it should. You're not advertising or even asking for ratings on your website, you just want to share and get advice on a single image. This is especially a good place for that if you haven't finished building your website yet.
thank you everybody, even the mean post. at least people are looking at it. im a busy body that loves bright colors. theres always next time
as for the blog, i will post that in Advesting later on, no promo here
actually I like it... the layout looks really good.
next one you make show it here.
i wanna see.