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Fairy Tale (my poem; please read and tell me what you think)





sondosia
You came to me
To chase a dream
But blinded
By the trophy’s gleam
You only see the heart
Within
But not the girl
Of bone and skin

I took your hand
And I believed
But still
Internally deceived
You led me
To your secret place
But left me
In the wind’s embrace

From your feeble house
Of straw,
No one knows
Just what you saw
Maybe sunshine,
Maybe rain
Just the shadows
Of your pain

But nonetheless,
You’re lost for good;
Alone
In the enchanted woods
I tried and tried
To lead you out
But you
Were sure you knew the route

The swirling magic
Captured you
Transformed
What you once thought was true
I tried and tried
To set you free
But you
Refused to follow me

When you at last
Emerged anew
I could not help but run
To you
And in your arms
I could forgive
But oh,
You’ve no more love to give.
Ghost900
Smile It is a pretty good one Smile

It flows well most of the time so I give it a 8.5/10
chastise
I like the way it flowed.
Did you use an A-B-A-B stanza?
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