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Risk (a poem)





sondosia
I flew my kite
In thunderstorms
Where fog and clouds
Took different forms
They're friends today
Tomorrow, foes
First flooding rains
Then heavy snows

I lay down on
The railroad tracks
Just like a figure
Made of wax
And waited for
My train to come
Its thunder now
A gentle hum

I ran away
And picked up speed
My heart devoured
By secret need
The wind tied tangles
In my hair
I gasped in vain
The empty air

I jumped right off a cliff
And flew
Above the starry sea,
So blue
And as I sailed away,
I knew
That when I land
I'll be with you.
KatanaSky
Hey I really liked that - when reading rhyming poetry I some times find myself cringing at how forced they are made but this is definitely not the case with the poem - I loved your choice of words.

Quote:

My train to come
Its thunder now
A gentle hum


I loved this part - there was just something about it. I could hear as well as feel what the narrator was hearing and feeling.

Great job!
tidruG
That's seriously a great poem. I write a little poetry and read some poetry also, and this is one of those poems that I really enjoyed reading quite a lot.
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