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smooth poem





meretyping
SMOOTH

Easy grace, liquid motion.
Fast and slow together, if such a thing exists.
More beautiful than I can express;
You are simply
An art form, the lazy runner, with
Limbs all melting into one.
Moving faster than the light
That shines down on your body
And its elegance
Of expression,
Moving me to lovely wonderment.

As you run, remember me here.
Watching you with
My breath caught in awe
as I look at your beautiful
Stride, and smooth muscles underneath.

Oh, but to be smooth!
With you.

---author's note---written many months ago---is it still good?---
Eiffel
I like some of the imagery. Very nice use of descriptors to accentuate the feeling of liquidity.

The line 'moving me to lovely wonderment' was a bit corny, though. It was the only bit that somewhat removed me from the feel of the rest of the poem.

Overall, an excellent piece. ^^
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