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POEM:This is just my mind pondering some thoughts on life!





lorikerrigan
I wonder

Thinking is all I do
What in life am I going through?
Will I ever have an explanation
Or know why life brings complications?
What does life have in store for me?
Are my thoughts reality?
Can I ever become sane?
What in life will I obtain?
I understand but, then again I dont
I want to leave but, know I wont
The time flies by and it doesnt change
What makes sense is sometimes strange
Curiosity is a great wonder
Floating along not going under
Holding on with thoughts and reason
Helps make time a bit more pleasing
How will I know if Ill ever pass?
Rise above into a higher class
Is there yet another place to go?
When is my time? I want to know
Beating the struggle along with the test
Now moving forward, still doing my best
Feeding on some patience to help me survive
My will just keeps growing every second Im alive
zuraguerra
Nice poem, I liked the feel and your conclusions. Maybe you should try writing in free verse: I see you have some "rhythm" in the chose of the words, but the constant rhyme somehow ruins the rhythmic feel of the whole poem.
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