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Poem - My Greed





menino
My greed

I want it in exclusion
for that they covet more
not realizing the illusion
of the value that lies in gore.

my greed has me overcome,
with little inside me to resist
and its harms will be done,
while I heed to its persists.

I succumb to its bids
in the advert of its reality
encompassed in its gist
not realizing its frugality.

Had I known true love and generosity,
and how it could have set me free
I would have stopped my falling velocity,
and that of my greed destroying me.

- Menino
coreymanshack
menino wrote:
My greed

I want it in exclusion
for that they covet more
not realizing the illusion
of the value that lies in gore.

my greed has me overcome,
with little inside me to resist
and its harms will be done,
while I heed to its persists.

I succumb to its bids
in the advert of its reality
encompassed in its gist
not realizing its frugality.

Had I known true love and generosity,
and how it could have set me free
I would have stopped my falling velocity,
and that of my greed destroying me.

- Menino


This line didn't really make much sense to me..
Quote:

while I heed to its persists

The last paragraph really went straight for the topic, but it seemed like the others danced around it.
I'll give it a 6/10. Keep up the good work Smile
menino
thanks for the input.

I will try to work on it and make it better Very Happy
Cliffer
hope to see more of your poems.
lorikerrigan
Very Happy i enjoyed it
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