I've tried a few things the last weeks.
Could you possibly give me some feedback?
Thank you in advance. =)
Picture 1:
Picture 2:
p.s. today i use cs3... but possibly later cs4... Hello steve1200, the pictures, you built has, look very great. I find you nice. Especially nicely I find the first picture. I like it particularly. You have succeeded really. But, the second picture is also nice. Further in such a way. If you make even more pictures, nevertheless, it puts again for the assessment here. Then they can be also valued.
well.. My first impression is : the 2 pictures lacked focus point(s).
1st pic : it seems that there's no connection between the flare on the left and the planet(?) on the right... and the positioning is rather weird I guess.
2nd pic : there's too much empty space around the planet (earth?) . It draws my focus away from the planet.
that's my 2 cents. Otherwise nice works! 
It's ok for a beginner. Nothing spectacular.
In the first one, there is no focal point. The stars in the background are also very plain. There just isn't much to them. Also the planet is too smooth, you need some sort of texture, and make it feel more real.
The same apply's for the second one. There is no focal point, way too much open space, there seems to be no stars, which is unusual for space art. It lacks major detail.
Sorry to criticize it so much, but I am just trying to help you out here. It's tough, but if you keep at it you'll eventually learn to create amazing things. I have been down the same road myself, as have every other designer.
Not bad, but good luck.
| r4inm4ker wrote: |
well.. My first impression is : the 2 pictures lacked focus point(s).
1st pic : it seems that there's no connection between the flare on the left and the planet(?) on the right... and the positioning is rather weird I guess.
2nd pic : there's too much empty space around the planet (earth?) . It draws my focus away from the planet.
that's my 2 cents. Otherwise nice works! |
| Ghost Rider103 wrote: |
It's ok for a beginner. Nothing spectacular.
In the first one, there is no focal point. The stars in the background are also very plain. There just isn't much to them. Also the planet is too smooth, you need some sort of texture, and make it feel more real.
The same apply's for the second one. There is no focal point, way too much open space, there seems to be no stars, which is unusual for space art. It lacks major detail.
Sorry to criticize it so much, but I am just trying to help you out here. It's tough, but if you keep at it you'll eventually learn to create amazing things. I have been down the same road myself, as have every other designer.
Not bad, but good luck. |
Thank you!
I really like feedback like your's are. So i can improve my working and get better.
I thank you a lot and possibly in a few days or weeks, you will see optimized versions!
Thanks!
StephHi there!
The pictures look very nice, especially the first one! Keep up the nice work!!! 
Thank you!
If I have enough time I will present you other pictures...
Okay, i've made a new picture and tried to work with the feedfack you gave me!
I think that's better than the first attempt. But I think layout composition is still lacking. The focus, as in the first one, is still evenly divided between the sun and the earth. Perhaps one of the way to improve it is to enlarge the earth size and reduce the sun's, or vice versa. That will concentrate the focal point.
I'm not a trained artist though, so it may just my personal preference and interpretation . | tdossi wrote: |
| Hello steve1200, the pictures, you built has, look very great. I find you nice. Especially nicely I find the first picture. I like it particularly. You have succeeded really. But, the second picture is also nice. Further in such a way. If you make even more pictures, nevertheless, it puts again for the assessment here. Then they can be also valued. |
dude...all big words in the wrong order you lost me after the first sentence too many commas/breaks...picking up mid sentence....just write simple | andysart380 wrote: |
| tdossi wrote: | | Hello steve1200, the pictures, you built has, look very great. I find you nice. Especially nicely I find the first picture. I like it particularly. You have succeeded really. But, the second picture is also nice. Further in such a way. If you make even more pictures, nevertheless, it puts again for the assessment here. Then they can be also valued. |
dude...all big words in the wrong order you lost me after the first sentence too many commas/breaks...picking up mid sentence....just write simple |
ahaha =)
His first language is German and in German we use lots of commas. Often much more than 2 per sentence...
But, that's not important. I would like to hear some feedback from you! ^^ 
I like the first picture, but what is it about?
| steve1200 wrote: |
Okay, i've made a new picture and tried to work with the feedfack you gave me!
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This one was a real improvement from the original picture. Now, for some reason, I didn't like the length of the light path that connects the sun to the planet (I mean, the one that touches the light side of the planet). I wonder how it would look like if it was a little shorter...another, completely different picture:
i know, the main orbit is a little bit too blue, i'm going to make it a little bit more transparent and less colorful.
You did a lot better job on the stars in your most recent image. They are actually starting to look somewhat real. Not quite yet, but definitely getting better.
You really need to work on blending those orbit looking things though. They are too strong of a color, and looked like they were just slapped on there.
Good work though, big improvement!
Thank you.
Any other opinions or helpful advices?
???
I would like to get more feedback of you...
